tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5590149204129251012.post2950915004666705078..comments2014-06-23T10:46:13.372+12:00Comments on Francis : Immersion AssemblyPES Blog Gmailhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10430434432980030044noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5590149204129251012.post-14245633888036807422012-04-25T19:15:30.469+12:002012-04-25T19:15:30.469+12:00Francis I am please to see you writing paragraphs ...Francis I am please to see you writing paragraphs about one main idea and that you have used a variety of sentence types (speech) and sentence beginnings. Well done.<br /><br />I think when you read your post again you will realise that you have not edited your work fully. You have sentences that need to be re worked because they are to long and need to be split up. Please re read your writing and edit if you notice any mistakes.Mr Chris Markshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14912841501575471267noreply@blogger.com