tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5590149204129251012.post6517502853802905460..comments2014-06-23T10:46:13.372+12:00Comments on Francis : Sleeping In A TentPES Blog Gmailhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10430434432980030044noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5590149204129251012.post-34395594049424298152012-04-16T10:29:41.040+12:002012-04-16T10:29:41.040+12:00That ground sure was uncomfortable wasn't it. ...That ground sure was uncomfortable wasn't it. I bet you were thankful you were sharing with Semi.<br /><br />You have doen well to use a variety of sentence types and you have managed to think about most of our checklist for writing an effective paragraph.<br /><br />Do you think you have managed to write your paragraph about one main idea? I think possible you could have written more about sleeping on the tent and made two paragraphs. Something for you to think about when next writing.Mr Chris Markshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14912841501575471267noreply@blogger.com