Thursday, February 16, 2012

Francis' Kiwifruit

The Kiwifruit felt like a porcupine because it was hairy like a persons beard. It feel soft on one side and hard on the other. It looked like a full moon.

When I looked at the half open kiwifruit it looked like there were ants on the inside, but it was the seeds. It was dribbling down my skin. The core looked like a banana in the middle.

We finally got to eat our fruit it was like eating a kiwi even though I was actually eating a kiwifruit.It tasted kind of sour when I first took a bite then I bit it again that time it didn’t taste sour it was yum I ate the first half of my kiwifruit then ate the second one. It was delicious.

1 comment:

  1. You have done a good job of using descriptive and interesting sentences with our topic words.

    You need to make sure you take the time when editing to read you writing out aloud. This helps you to hear if it makes sense and see where you can make it better. I think the final paragraph would have been better if you had done this.

    Also important to remember to write about one main idea in your paragraphs.

    I am wondering how you knew it was like eating a kiwi? Have you had a roast Kiwi for dinner before?


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